"Or is that just me of you"
- I don't like this line. Even in a song I can't see it being sung. It's kind of confusing. I might be wrong, it's hard to tell without hearing it sung but at the same time I can kind of hear it in my head, and it just seems off to me.

"You know I always drive be your home"
be = by

"Well I don't know what I've been told
But this tension here is getting old
I wish you'd answer the damn phone
The problem started when I drove you home"
- Love the first three lines. The last line is okay, it works I guess. Not sure if it works every time but the first time said it does.

Well done. (: I really enjoyed this piece. I could almost hear it in my head, but at the same time there were a few spots that were iffy. I'm sure it's just because I don't know how you're putting it together. But as I've said before, if you know what you're doing I'm sure it's put together just fine.

Hey! dats nicely written.. no doubt! i liked it....

Love

Oh man this makes me sad cuz i been there and its ugly!
but any who! i love it! i always like a poem i can relate to cuz it brings out feelings and i bet for many others too!
very well written, i like the flow of it, i like the amount of rhyming. i always feel like i HAVE to ALWAYS rhyme, and i want to break out of that, and i think trying to write a poem like this, with SOME rhyming would be good for me to try! thanks for the idea!