Well-expressed thoughts and this was a very wonderfully written poem. I have never heard of that form before, but thank you for explaining it below. I enjoyed reading this piece by you, it was unique and full of emotions. 5/5 from me, take care...Keep writing, always and forever....

Interesting piece I must say, you actually brought it to life through your own unique words and originality. Well done with this, I can't say I have any suggestions to make this better.. I thought everything was well done poetic wise. Flow was flawless and word choice wasnt "blah" I actually enjoyed this piece very much. It wasn't cliche, it was original and I like to see that in poetry.

Well done.
5/5.

I don't know what to say about this poem if I’m being honest the flow was good the vocabulary was flawless but it just didn’t hold my attention even with how short it was. I really don't know I cantt seem to make a decision about this poem.

First off, I like the form. I've never heard of it but you promote it here excellently, and you inspired me to try to write one myself.
I couldn't decipher every line, but I believe that the poem should be open for several interpretations, and this one certainly offers that.

The choice of words is outstanding from the beginning to the end, along with the flow.
What I liked the most is the vividness of the poem. In each line, you managed to paint such a memorable pictures.

Well written, innovative and original from the beginning to the end.