Comments : Old Friend

  • 15 years ago

    by Skyfire

    This poem sounds a bit like it was meant to be sung to quiet strumming. It has a beautiful, gentle flow.

  • 15 years ago

    by Quietly Versed

    It's just there to listen
    Glowing with grace
    Waiting to heal
    What we wish to erase

    i love rhyming that is not forced. such as the verse above (also my favorite part of this piece. This poem is like i told you in my message "well put together". I believe that you achieved your goal with this piece. The message is simple, yet described in a beautiful complex way. I would like to see how the poem would play out if you never really come out and say you are talking about the moon. Simply let the reader assume it. Which, could have been done by what you have written. I enjoyed it, and thankyou for thinking out your poem rather than thrwing emotions on paper and calling it art.