Ayee..!
Awwh this one is so sweet and so great!
i can't believe you won't it Lol jk :P
Great Job! 5/5 for sure!

Just a couple pointers that people have given me that really helped my writing evolve.
1) add punctuation/capitalization of words it helps the appearance of the poem it seems more professional and official cleaned up basically : )
2) don't just go for rhyme sometimes it ruins the emotion don't get me wrong i thought this was a great poem! i just think some lines were there because they rhymed. Maybe jot down what you're really feeling than take that deep and heart felt emotion and toy with it to make it a poem ((if that makes sense !))
3) keep the lines around the same length. It will really help the flow! and the reader to stay on track

I think this poem has a lot of potential. You have great imagery and obviously emotion : ) Just maybe try for less filler words and the forced rhyme. Not all poems rhyme! some are just free flowing

I honestly do think you did a great job that's why im giving you a 5/5