Anticlimactic

Very intense and intruguing write ...
capturing the reader's attention from starting to the last ...

"Forevers not so bad"
-I promise.
^^ I loved these lines so much... it speaks so much ... pain ... pleasure... beautifully blended..

"You held my life
in you're palm
and yet you lost yours."
^^ awww these are so touching lines... it really touched my heartstrings ... beautifully penned...

"you expire into the
nothingness you came."

^^another set of deep moving lines ...

awesome work

"I awoke,
to the presence
of a ghost."

This is very captivating to open up with, you have me grasping each and every word.

"Darling don't go."
-You incinerate me.
How can something
so beautiful
haunt my soul.
Anticlimactic.
"Darling don't leave."
I can't breathe.
-Goodbye."

Wow, what deeply felt emotions here, excellent wording that really moved me.

"Another nightmare,
Where could you be?"

I love the question tagged on, really adds great effect.

"Darling don't go"

Love how you repeat this line, beautiful.

"Every time I wake
you expire into the
nothingness you came.
Sometimes life seems
pointless; Tiring.
"Darling don't leave"
I can't breathe.
Goodbye."

I'm breathless, you have written such a heartbreaking masterpiece. So many brilliant stanzas that have been joyful to read. 5/5 from me, take care.

The sadness in this piece was so alive in your flawless choice of words. What a touching and heart breaking write! I could tell this was scripted from your heart because everything sounded so honest and true. I loved the form you wrote in, it was different than what you usually see which made it that much more interesting to read. It all flowed so flawlessly and I read it a couple of more times to truly grasp its meaning.

"You held my life
in you're palm
and yet you lost yours."
^This was written so beautifully! Such meaning behind such a simple phrase. I loved your choice of words here....crafted flawlessly. What irony in your words...I applaud you!

I truly enjoyed this write Mel. I hope everything is okay though. :/ The sadness is felt so real to me and I hope its not something you're experiancing.

Well done.
*5/5* :]

This is so incredibly touching, sad, beautiful. Oh, I could go on and on with the adjectives... So many brilliant lines!

"You held my life
in you're palm
and yet you lost yours.
Pathetic, the way
revolving doors swing."

^^^I just love the way you worded this. Oh, and the ending is perfect. Very well written...