This is so incredibly touching, sad, beautiful. Oh, I could go on and on with the adjectives... So many brilliant lines!

"You held my life
in you're palm
and yet you lost yours.
Pathetic, the way
revolving doors swing."

^^^I just love the way you worded this. Oh, and the ending is perfect. Very well written...

The sadness in this piece was so alive in your flawless choice of words. What a touching and heart breaking write! I could tell this was scripted from your heart because everything sounded so honest and true. I loved the form you wrote in, it was different than what you usually see which made it that much more interesting to read. It all flowed so flawlessly and I read it a couple of more times to truly grasp its meaning.

"You held my life
in you're palm
and yet you lost yours."
^This was written so beautifully! Such meaning behind such a simple phrase. I loved your choice of words here....crafted flawlessly. What irony in your words...I applaud you!

I truly enjoyed this write Mel. I hope everything is okay though. :/ The sadness is felt so real to me and I hope its not something you're experiancing.

Well done.
*5/5* :]

"I awoke,
to the presence
of a ghost."

This is very captivating to open up with, you have me grasping each and every word.

"Darling don't go."
-You incinerate me.
How can something
so beautiful
haunt my soul.
Anticlimactic.
"Darling don't leave."
I can't breathe.
-Goodbye."

Wow, what deeply felt emotions here, excellent wording that really moved me.

"Another nightmare,
Where could you be?"

I love the question tagged on, really adds great effect.

"Darling don't go"

Love how you repeat this line, beautiful.

"Every time I wake
you expire into the
nothingness you came.
Sometimes life seems
pointless; Tiring.
"Darling don't leave"
I can't breathe.
Goodbye."

I'm breathless, you have written such a heartbreaking masterpiece. So many brilliant stanzas that have been joyful to read. 5/5 from me, take care.

Very intense and intruguing write ...
capturing the reader's attention from starting to the last ...

"Forevers not so bad"
-I promise.
^^ I loved these lines so much... it speaks so much ... pain ... pleasure... beautifully blended..

"You held my life
in you're palm
and yet you lost yours."
^^ awww these are so touching lines... it really touched my heartstrings ... beautifully penned...

"you expire into the
nothingness you came."

^^another set of deep moving lines ...

awesome work