What an amazing write. It was incredibly sad.. you really fulfilled the requirement of a twist! i was not expecting that one. The two of you wrote together very well and this piece came out fantastic.
I cannot imagine how that would feel.. to go through something like that.. that poor guy.. and poor women for that matter.. how horrible.
Anyways, a fantastic poem with a nice flow.
5/5

Dear Krista,

You tow made such a beautiful poem...what a story! So captivating and so much hope in the end, for he had lost his lady, but still had their child:)

Congrats on this gem!

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid