by Brittany Jan 17, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Cars rolling fast |
by Kurt
Another well written poem. Perhaps when you write your next poem (whenever that may be) try working with different ways to start sentences. I've noticed you have a tendency to use "so" as an intro to a stanze or sentence. Try and find words with more syllables to make up for the rhythm that might be lost by removing the word. |