Black Sun

by Brittany   Jan 17, 2009


Cars rolling fast
People walking by
I take my one last breathe
It seems time has stopped passing by
Take one step
If you slip try not to fall
Your path is covered in ice
Just seem big don't let them know your small

When the world stops caring
Maybe you should too
You can give up on them
But never give up on you
Even if you have to drift away to your " Special Place"
Never let them see you down
Never a tear on your face

So the time has come
Your shell has finally cracked
From all of the bad memories
Too much bad memories, you cannot even look back
So they kicked when you were down
And turned your sun black
Took everything you worked for
And never gave it back

So its okay if your done
You don't have to try
You don't have to do anything to make them feel good inside
If your done I understand
You can stop right now
Just try to turn your black sun gold
Some way some how

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  • 15 years ago

    by Kurt

    Another well written poem. Perhaps when you write your next poem (whenever that may be) try working with different ways to start sentences. I've noticed you have a tendency to use "so" as an intro to a stanze or sentence. Try and find words with more syllables to make up for the rhythm that might be lost by removing the word.