I call out your name
to have you stand near me
You turn around but then
I wake up from my sleep.

^^^ I like how you open up the poem having to call ur lover's name
but when he turns, it's only it ure dream

I hear your voice
and it sounds oh so clear
But its only in my head
cause you're no where near

^^ Here you have shown wahat you have shown in the 1st stanza
but this time it's the sound version

I stare are the stars
shining oh so bright
You used to be the one
guiding me with your light

^^ I like the idea of you using star representing him to be your
of your guidance.Btw I think you meant 'at' the stars instead of 'are'??

Where are you now
I wish your heart knew
That even after all this time
I'm still loving you

^^ Aww this is really sad after all of the times tt u have gone thru
with him, he still roams in ur heart

Countless memories
in a million photographs
We were so in love
yet we still cross paths

^^^ Wow i must say that this is the best of all the stanza
The way you picture this is absolutely fantastic.

I miss so much about you
that it brings me to tears
You were my first love
the one ill talk of for many years

^^^ What a great way to end this. It is trues that for some 1st love
is truly the deepest and the sweetest.

Overall I must say that you have painted this memories beautifully
and you have done a fantastic job on makig it rhyme.

Excellent write
5/5

That was good hunnie =)
I only gave it 4/5 to tell you that you wrote much better than it.

Where are you now
I wish your heart knew
That even after all this time
I'm still loving you

I don't know why this stanza gave me chills..even though it's not my first time to read something like that..maybe because of my state too.

Keep writing.
You should give more thoughts to poetry =]
Love you xxx

This poem reminds me of my first love. I can really relate to it. I love your poems your're one of my favorite writers!! Great piece!

Beautiful. Flawless. Perfect.
"Countless memories
in a million photographs
We were so in love
yet we still cross paths" < I love this stanza.
5/5, Em

Countless memories
in a million photographs
We were so in love
yet we still cross paths

I miss so much about you
that it brings me to tears
You were my first love
the one ill talk of for many years

omg dora i love it it makes me remember me and my first and its so true 5/5