Comments : Everlasting Conflict (between my brain and my heart)

  • 15 years ago

    by Shokry Al Qubati

    Wow! This poem confirms the proverb "LOVE IS BLIND"

    Very nice poem; keep it up 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This is one of the best poems, that i've read, perfect flow and your diction was breath takinh. i loved reading it. Shanik

  • 15 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Wow like i must say you have created one amazing poem here!!! i could so relate i mean who hasn''t had their heart and head having a dispute?! so many girls will relate to this
    you did a great job with words !! the only rough spot for me was the first stanza the second and last line seemed to forced with rhyme i think that you should re arrange the second line to say "In fact they have always been number one enemies" it flows better!! than you could fix up the fourth line accordingly !

    great job though!! honestly i loved it : ) 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    My brain and my heart have never been friends
    In fact they have always been enemies number one
    When my heart is on it's knees begging me to stay
    My brain reaches out a hand and says come

    ^nicely way of openin your poem here. with the second stanzal go "always been number one enemies" it sounds a bit better to me. also it was very imaginie.

    This is a conflict that has no solution
    It has been going on for these 22 years of mine
    When my heart says that it wants to fall
    My brain decides that he is not the right guy

    ^oh wow. this reminds me of this one song called "issues" by the saturdays. it's a realie nice song that relate to this. a fight between them that never seems to end.

    I can clearly see a picture of them in my head
    My heart with a halo and my brain with the flame
    My heart saying that it's not fair to loose an opportunity of love
    But my brain shouting that my soul has been through enough pain

    ^I can relate to this part. and many girls have as well. getting there heartbroken not wanting to fall again but u cant control your feelings for someone but ur mind keeps telling you No. once again very imagie. could see the heart with halo and ur brain with the flame. i wouldnt change a thing.

    They both have good motives
    And their arguments are strong
    Leaving my poor soul in confusion
    Afraid to make a desicion that will turn out to be wrong

    ^wow a very touching n powerful part you wrote here. flow is just great.

    Whenever my brain is right
    It is quick to rub it in the face of my heart
    For leaving this frozen soul of mine
    In unimaginable pain and torn apart

    ^this reminded me wen i rub wen im right to mi chicko. once again i could see that happenin while readin your piece. you have a way with words indeed. =]

    Every time my soul is hurting
    It decides to next time listen to the brain
    But as soon as love comes around
    The heart is jumping and screaming, driving my soul insane

    ^amazing words. simple very simple but sends such a strong message. war against eachother never seems to end without ur brain or heart getting hurt.

    So when you ask me why I have troubles making up my mind about love
    Think of my sould that wants to see things clear
    But is unable to make a desicion
    Because of an everlasting conflict that never wants to disapper

    ^amazing way of ending your wonderful poem but "sould" shouldnt it be "soul" ? i truly loved it cuz I can realte to have a war with my mind n mi corazon.
    5/5 for me

    TaKe CaRe,
    Frenchy

  • 15 years ago

    by bekka dollface

    This was very amazing!
    i love it!
    you have so much talent and it shows
    great job on this one<33

  • 15 years ago

    by On Cupids Bad Side

    I can totally relate to this poem, i have this problem too. But my heart usually wins out in the end, even if I do get hurt. But amazing poem, great write :)