This piece of yours was quite outstanding in my opinion. Again your work never ceases to amaze me. Each line etches something new within it to really grasp onto the readers attention. I found the meaning of the poem simple yet strong entwined into one.

"it's getting darker
as the air forgets to breathe"

what strong emotions you have bounded into this poem. Expecially in the two lines above. For some reason they lasted so beautifully in my mind while creating a dark yet tranquil feeling over the atmosphere. Well done. This was definitly an amazing read. -Mel

What an image you left behind in my mind.
Its like a frightful feeling yet so very sad too.
A touching write that tries to grasp at life..
take care.