You are a good poet, after a few fine tuning, you'll be excellent. Keep practising and you can't go wrong, love the emotions in this. Well done!
Gem

Wow, I am impressed how you just tell the world about how you feel and for whom!
I agree with Gem: a little tuning, but you could do that by lots of reading.

Keep writing, I enjoyed your poem very much!

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid