For she prevails

I feel like you read my mind. Well, except for in my case it'd be a "he" lol but i was really good. Please write more. :)

OMG.What a wonderful piece.It was so touching and emotions were so true.I really felt them.

Wonderful..I am so speechless.

Excellent.5\5...

I loved this piece, written well. Here are some thoughts on certain parts:

"It blew so hard , the wind
and in my ear it whispered her name
her trembling voice, i heard
Trapped within the drops of rain"

First line: Delete the space between "hard" and ",".

Same with line three.

Capitalize all of the "i"s in your poem, just correct grammar.

"She of my thoughts, possesed
and In my dreams, she always came
will my grief soon be over ?
or forever it shall remain ?"

Delete the spaces in the last two lines.

Fourth line: It would sound better if re-worded to "or forever shall it remain?".

*Also, sometimes you had the first letter of each beginning word in a line capitalized, others not, the form would look better if you did capitalize all of the first letters of the first words in lines.*

"the memories defiled
by the tears wasted in vain
her absence in my life
drains my sanity, Drives me insane
her everlasting smile
revels forever in my brain

she ..
holds the key
to my salvation
of the agony"

Excellent stanza! Very captivating and held my attention! 4/5 from me, take care...

So greatly written. your a great writer. keep up the good work. 5/5

Very nice use of words
i liked it very much
xox