by ether
You need to fix this. Either 1. Add punctuation to make the poem a little less disjointed. Or 2. Make the lines even so they flow better, for example: |
Ok first : 0 i looked at your poem when i opened it and felt overwhelmed maybe separate it into stanzas? it really helps the reader when it is all combined like that it looks like its going to be work to read it and you dont want that : ) |
This is a beautiful piece. It's very thought provoking and expressive. I love your comparison of kodak and poetry. I give this |
by Saving Grace
Wow. Very descriptive and powerful. Very interesting write i think. Youve done an excellent job. i enjoyed the read. 5/5 |