Love the flow and rhyme passion released brutally honest soul searching

well done

I really liked the first couple of stanzas; they read well and were easy to follow.

The way you used a familiar character like Cupid but put a twisted image of his POSIONED DART instead of his love arrow was great. I love when writers put their own twist on familiar objects.

I also like the fake mood projected in the next stanzas. A lot of people can really relate to this. It helped give me a way to see myself inside the poem.

In the 5th and 6th stanzas, I like the way you tried to deny yourself from feeling your emotions. It helped to set a background image that was not mentioned before, but was somehow known by the reader.

The last stanza was great as well. You really seem know how to end a poem with an image that sticks with the reader.

I love it! Filled with emotion! I don't really want to make this too long so I'll just tell you the main points. The flow was great, yet again. My favorite stanza...

"Someone had torn me up inside
Carelessly ripped apart my heart
Abused all of my love and trust
Been shot with Cupid's poisoned dart"

The last line is so beautiful. I like the way you say "Cupid's poisoned dart." It has really intense emotion in just three words. I agree with the person above me how they say it's btter thn "love arrow." So much more intense they way you say it. <3

I absolutely love how you unfurl this new love story of yours. Opening it up with how you've been hurt by ur past lover then slowly transend to how u give love another chance... and having it all to be worthwhile. Well certainly sometimes the reason why some relationships didn't work out is because fate has better plan for us. In short love just works in the strangest way. It was definitely a delightful to read.

Excellent Job
5/5

Again, being the punctuation freak I am, it slightly bothered me but Im used to it now.
Excellent poem. I like the rhyme scheme and the flow. Word usage was again wonderful. I usually don't read long poems but this had me going til the end! Amazing write!
Krista

It was a wonderful poem. i can relate to it. being afriad to love once again n i know other ppl can relate to this. the flow was nice. it was amazing from beginning to end.

And I'm so completely lost
Everytime I gaze into those eyes
Every second in your arms
Is another moment of paradise

Together we're a perfect fit
Tried to resist but now I see
Caring, attentive, gentle and kind
You've shown me what love can be

these completly blown my mind. i trule love it.
5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy