Truthfully, I think the were good parts and bad parts. For example, I thought the third stanza was very messy, and it ruined the flow, and that the last line of the second stanza could've been shorter, slso to help with the flow. However, I thought the opening and closing stanzas were great. Especially the later, and especially the very last line. The reason I like these stanzas, were because of their power, wording and rhymes. You had very strong opening and closing stanzas, which is key to a good poem.

Brad