Win Me Again With That Smile

"Come, sweep me off my feet
With that smile so bitterly sweet.
Fix this restless heartbeat:
Again, once more, where shall we meet?"

^^I really liked this opening stanza, the last line creates a sense of mystery which hooks me into the poem and keeps me wanting to read more.

"Black shadows under eyes,
The curious looks you despise.
Seeing through my disguise,
I cannot tell any more lies."

^^I don't think you need the fillers in this stanza, (I, the, you etc) maybe :

Black shadows under eyes,
Curious looks you despise.
Seeing through my disguise,
Refuse to tell any more lies.

"Please, I want to end this,
But there are things that I will miss:
Intoxicating kiss.
Bound to forever reminisce."

^^I really enjoyed this stanza, full of emotion and depth, the emotion behind the words is clearly felt by the reader.

"Avoid the tears I'll cry,
Here, take my hand, and we can fly.
Dodge the looming goodbye.
Let our broken hearts soar too high."

^^favourite stanza so far, the imagery within this lines is beautiful, it's like I can -see- everything that you're describing.

"I could walk life alone:
No, you will always be my own.
But to stay on this throne
Means these heart strings will be unknown."

^^Again, I think this would flow better if you eliminate some of the fillers. Maybe :

Could walk life alone:
No, you will always be my own.
To enable me to stay on this throne
Means these heart strings will be unknown.

Or something along those lines.

"Giving reasons like trial,
Attempts to forget aren't worthwhile.
You know I'm versatile,
So, win me again with that smile. "

^^I really enjoyed this closing stanza, moving and powerful, a beautiful way to wrap this piece up.

Ooo I did like this! Good choice of words, they weren't predictable rhymes. 5/5

OMJ!!! I love it. It's absolutely wonderful! I can't see why nobody has rated for it yet becasue it's awesome! I love your rhyme scheme, like all four lines rhymed. WONDERFUL 5/5

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