I cant hear the Rain anymore

by Rodney Kirby   Jan 27, 2009


I CANT HEAR THE RAIN ANYMORE,
GOD KNOWS WHAT MY HEART HAS IN STORE
MAYBE ILL JUST WANDER BENEATH ITS SPRAY
YOUR WORD ECHOING WISHING I'D STAY,

DISCOURAGEMENT HAS CREPT INSIDE MY HEAD
I DWELL ON ALL THE HATEFUL-THINGS I SAID
I CAN NO LONGER HEAR OUR FAVORITE SONG
ITS ALL GONE, I HAVE BEEN LONELY TOO LONG

MY LIES AND DECEITFULNESS BECAME HER FEARS
MY WORDS WERE A POISON TO HER EARS
THE WATER SPLASHED UPON MY SKIN
SHE HAS CONDEMNED ME AS GOD CONDEMNS SIN

LOVE HAS ENABLED ME TO DO MANY THINGS
IT MOVES ME LIKE A PUPPET MOVED BY STRINGS
I FOLLOWED YOU HERE, WITH A PROMISE TO KEEP
A HAND TOUCHING YOURS AS YOU LAY IN SLEEP

I CAN NO LONGER HEAR THE RAIN ANYMORE
I OFTEN THINK OF THINGS BEFORE.
EVEN STILL- I WATCH IT DECSEND,
WISHING IN MY HEART I COULD HEAR IT AGAIN.

THE PAIN OF MISSING HER HAS DEAFENED MY EARS,
WISHING I COULD HOLD HER FOR THE REST OF MY YEARS
SILENCE HAS REPLACED THE SOUND OF MY RAIN
ALTHOUGH I CANT HEAR IT, I CAN STILL FEEL THE PAIN,

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  • 15 years ago

    by Cara

    Im pretty sure its against the rules to have your poem all in caps and i dont think it added anything to the piece anyway. So maybe change it to lowercase.

    WISHING IN MY HEART I COULD HEAR IT AGIAIN.
    ^^ should be again.

    the title was great, it lured me in. It stood out and made me choose this poem to read and comment. So that was good.
    The actual poem was pretty good as well. It was an enjoyable read and you incorporated some strong messages throughout it. I like the way you 'went deaf' after losing her. Really nice job with that.

    Overall a good read.

  • 15 years ago

    by ShyandHurt

    "THE PAIN OF MISSING HER HAS DEAFENED MY EARS,
    WISHING I COULD HOLD HER FOR THE REST OF MY YEARS
    SILENCE HAS REPLACED THE SOUND OF MY RAIN
    ALTHOUGH I CANT HEAR IT, I CAN STILL FEEL THE PAIN,"

    I do believe is the best part.

    And the way you used poison...was amazing. You used it to create an awesomely powerful feeling in the reader. You created a poem where now whenever someone hears "poison" they will think of this poem.

    Amazing job =)

  • 15 years ago

    by Jo

    I like this you did a good job
    Your choice of words were great

  • 15 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    I've got to admit.. the title really caught my attention, but I think you shouldn't put it [along with the actual poem] in all caps. I think it's against the rules too. >< Just saying...

    I still really like the title.. and I think the poem was pretty good. I liked your use of the word "poison", and I also like how you were saying that the pain of missing her is so strong that it's made you go deaf. I've never thought of it that way....

    Good job. :]

    Cayce.

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