A beautiful and very touching poem, Moucha.
I am so sorry for your loss:/
She must have been in her early twenties then, your girl Rita...
Your poems are always so touching and often make me cry, like this one does.
A very well written poem with so much tender love displayed, bravo CJ!

*hugs*

5/5 Ingri

I love the imagery and emotion evoked in this piece, the rhythm and flow is almost flawless!
But, I have to say that this stanza

'And your gentle touch on my cheeks
Make the feelings in my body mix'

is not needed, it jars the flow, and the rhyme doesn't work. The rest of the poem is beautiful though, and really saddening. I admired the ending too, CJ
Great write.

That is really deep and it show u loved her and that u miss her,

...You never told me about this CJ. :/ Snuggles*

Very good poem and very sad story. Five out of five.

"Closing my eyes, and holding my tears
Roll in a ball, and block off my ears."
This is very sad indeed. Dry cry without tears, yet your heart cries for the one you once cared. It's never easy to say a final goodbye to the one we loved. CJ, you are kind hearted and sensitive that's why when you do cares about someone it came directly from your heart. Very well done, 5/5, kel.

Ohhh dear, CJ, you have never mentioned this to me, it was so saddening! :(
I agree with Porcy, your opening stanza, showed your vulnerability all too well.
Gosh, this was such a different sort of write for you, it was incredible heart breaking. You really expressed sadness well through your words, it put the reader almost in your position, whilst reading the poem.
Really well done.
5/5

Omg, i am so sorry, for your loss..

but i loved the poem. it had great emotion. it almost made me cry...

As always, i love your ending, it was great. And i also loved how u started it.

"Nothing I can say to express my miss
To your presence with me and your kiss"
^^that was beautifur. :).

Great job!

Aly

This made me cry but its really good. im sorry about your loss.