Kiss Away the Distance, Tonight.

AMAZING!!!!!!! You completely had my sttention at the first part, and kept it until the last lol. This is a really unique and original poem!! I love the flow!! I can totally picture it as well! Excellent poem keep it up!
5/5

Soda.

Let's feel the reality behind our dreams,

Ooo I love this line. It's so unique. Dreams and reality. Awesome.

For the last line I think you mean between us. :]

I liked it. The words you used and the way you put them together just made this poem a whole. Great job Tempsy. :D Five out of five.

Temps,

The title draws the reader in straight away.

Stanza 1:
Thirsty lips, well this is a wonderful way to describe the need for a kiss, for an embrace.
The image of an empty room with no love is clear for me as I read the word 'furnish me'
Trace each crevice, well I see this as the physical kiss, lips tracing. It could also mean exploring a lover's soul? The word 'delicately lends a request for care of something/one fragile.

Stanza 2:
A wish for change, a change in circumstances A kiss from a lover can make all things right, can't they? Love can bridge any gap and mend any wound, surely?

Stanza 3:
I see this verse as the person lying back in bed with their eyes closed. Maybe these lovers are on the phone and by shutting out the visible their voices can surround one another and they can forget the distance between them and instead imagine themselves together in the embrace that they both yearn for and need so urgently.

Stanza 4:
'Thoughts of you will continue to flow' these words are strong and show a loyalty that will endure all. Not only endure, but remain strong through all this hardship. A heart will not break as long as there is hope to keep it strong.

Stanza 5:
Problems will indeed unravel if, a person believes they can be and is committed to a shared goal. Goal - happiness with one another.

Stanza 6:
This means a lot this final stanza. I remember waiting all day just so that I could go on line and see my love on my monitor. The distance literally evaporates with a lovers image and their voice melting a heart with a loving smile.
I like how you finish this with a repeated line. 'Kiss away the distance between..'

Temps, I understand this poem all too well.

((Hugs))

Take care

Michael

First of all Temps, I lovee the title! Very unique and caught my eye.

"Lips thirsty for your sensual embrace,
furnish this tender soul with romance.
Trace each crevice smoothly, delicately"
^I LOVED how you started it. It was filled with imagery and made me interested in what else you had to say. I loved your word choice here and how you said "lips thirsty for your sensual embrace" what a beautiful line! I could imagine it all so clearly in my mind. "Furnish this tender soul" Another flawless phrase that says so much.

"Kiss away the distance between us,
let it evaporate, to bring us closer,"
^Wow Temps! Beautiful! I loved how different this was from your other poems, it felt like you took some chances and they paid off. Flawless word choice once again.

"let's feel the reality behind our dreams,"
^Okay wow. Has to be one of the best lines I have everrr heard. Girl this was amazing! It has so much meaning behind it that it can be interpreted in soo many ways. We all wish that the dreams we have can be turned into reality by the person we love and you worded that flawless here. I am in awe. Go Temps!

"Thoughts of you will continue to flow,
vivid love through these eyes will show,"
^I liked the rhyme here but it throws off the flow if randomly in he middle you rhyme but not anywhere else in the poem. It would have made more sense if you rhymed at the end if you didn't want to do it throughout the whole piece. It just seemed random to me and didn't fit although I love how you worded it.

"Happiness to see eachother will result"
^there is a space between each other

"Eagerly awaiting your adorable face,"
^I don’' like "adorable" it doesn't seem to fit.

Perfect ending, I loved how you tied in the title and added a bit of repetition. I like this style from you Temps because it's different than what you usually do with the long lines. This was perfect and flowed flawlessly. I like to see that you're taking risks because it shows you want to grow as a poet and that's what everybody should strive for. I'm glad I read this hun, has to be one of the best you've written. Keep taking chances!

Well done!
*5/5* :]