Wow! i enjoyed reading this one.. 4/5

With very little words you have managed to capture the emotions that you have for the person tt u love. I like the idea you infuse the force of nature and also the sound of everyday things into this poem , I think it's very original.

I let go of everything around me.

^^ This was a great was to end the poem. When you love someone so much, you wouldn't wanna think at anything else except bout tt person

Excellent Job
5/5

I enjoyed the read right to the last verse and then there is something that is off. It just does not flow as well as the rest to me.

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