Sporadically inclined

I liked this poem to be honest and I cant say I fully agree with some of the other comments, even though you were direct it's different to the all the same poems i see on here often, sometimes it's nice for a change =]
As for how you presented the piece I thought it was quite good, maybe you could improve on it a little but I think it's fine as it is. You have the potential to be a very good writter ^^ your wording is great and I honestly really liked this poem.

Very elaborate piece, it was written well, I enjoyed reading this. I agree witht the Tasteless but still, you amazed the reader and had the completely entranced. 5/5 from me, nice read, take care!
Keep writing, always and forever...

I like it, a little short but to the point, i felt like it might be missing something, thats just me. very good
5/5

Its good just give it time and people will come around and do yours

Amber

I like this, again, if longer, much better. But the blend with society and one's self is like a culture shock in itself!

5/5
the Raven