First, all of the "i"s in your poem should be capitalized, its just proper grammar. And the repetition of "Forever will" really ruined this piece for me when reading it, try re-wording that and write something else that unique.
Also in this poem you wrote "wont" and it should be "won't". But otherwise than that I liked what you put it was straight from your heart and heartfelt. 4/5 from me, take care.