Your With Her

First just like in your other poem, this is hard to read with all the slang words. Write it in the correct way, and your poem will be better. What's the point of having all these slang words when it just ruins your piece? Sorry if I sound harsh I don't mean to be but its annoying to have "u" instead of "you", just write it out please.

"You asked me to be Ur girl
As a fool i accepted and said yes
I never got to see u again
Ur cousin tells me Ur playing me"

First line: "Ur" should be "your".
Second line: "i" should be "I".
Third line: "u" should be "you".
Fourth line: "Ur" should be "Your" and the second "Ur" should be "You're".

"Caz Ur still with her
And that u have 3girls at a time
You play me like a ping pong ball"

First line: "Caz" should be "Because" and "Ur" should be "You're".

And for the rest of the poem, you have "Ur" and "u" so just change that like I suggessted above please.

"but there ain't no sincerity in Ur eyes"

"ain't" should be "isn't".

"even Ur friend saying u leaving to go with vanessa"

Re-read this line, it doesn't make sense when reading upon it.

Overall, 3/5, besides those errors I stated, I felt like there could have been more emotions and details/descriptions for the reader. Keep writing, always and forever...

Wow. powerful. tell him how it is. from the sounds of it u dnt need him but he needs u. good writing 5/5