Twilight Love

Another well written love poem. You did a lot better on this one I think. The rhymes were really good and again, the imagery was amazing. There was a good flow to this poem as well, and it turned out to be a really nice story. Good stuff.

This one has a flow within the quatrain that stands out in the beautiful passionate love poem
great imagery transcending the natural realm

"Hearts entangled in emotional jungle
Laying inside immortal's tranquil temple
Dreams and reality coexist in our sparkle
Defying gravity, flying to another level"

- This stanza stuck out to me. And, not in a good way. Well, it's not a bad way... I guess. But, you know it's like they didn't flow too well and were a bit more blunt than the rest of the poem. They fit with the rest of the poem okay, as long as you're wanting this to stick out a bunch.

I've always been a fan or your poetry and this is another one to add to the list. Even with that one stanza the poem is still an amazing poem. Kudos.

The flow was on and off on some parts of ur poem. i got lost of what u were trying to say here. the word didnt go that much into this piece.
4/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

"Romance within the twilight zone
Misty forest shrouded us alone
Living in a realm of our own
Love revolving around a cyclone"

^^I really enjoyed this opening stanza, the imagery within these lines is beautifully portrayed and creates striking pictures in my mind while the flow is beautiful right from the opening line.

"Mystical aura radiates around us
Motions blurred, circulating fast
Chemical affections resulting blast
Existing in neither future nor the past"

^^I felt the flow was of -slightly- in the third line, but only very slightly, maybe try adding a pause after affections?

"Scripts of the mind unable to decode
Burning anxiety waiting to explode
Two worlds collide in an act of devote
Secrets no longer hidden behind the coat"

^^I found this to be the strongest stanza so far, the emotion and depth within these lines is beautifully written and easily felt by the reader.

"Hearts entangled in emotional jungle
Laying inside immortal's tranquil temple
Dreams and reality coexist in our sparkle
Defying gravity, flying to another level"

^^favourite stanza so far, I found this verse to be filled with so much meaning and depth, and it held so much beautiful imagery and power.

"Quest for eternity awaits our blood's fusion
Lingering in questions, choosing option
Freed from death, living in eternal dimension
Fate hanging on an irreversible decision "

^^I love these closing lines here, I found them to be strong and hardhitting, something that will certainly stay with the reader for a while after finishing the poem.

I think you did a wonderful job with this piece.