Comments : Hold My Hand; Let's Begin.

  • 15 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Temps,

    Title: Hold my hand, let's begin.
    This title is like a smile and a hug all in one. It says you can trust me and no matter what, together is best from start till finish.

    Stanza 1:
    As the title suggests, we visualise the stronger of the two holding the others hand, but not just holding, no! Here the fingers are laced, symbolising a friendship that is sincere and trustworthy.

    Stanza 2:
    Here the trust image is reinforced and the recognition that friendship requires commitment over a long period of time. A new beginning, this suggests that there may have been an attempt at friendship in the past, but now with lessons learnt it is time to try again.

    Stanza 3:
    Here we see the confirmation of what was hinted in the previous stanza. It is inspirational and helps others realise that friendships can stumble, but if there is real genuine affection then it is always worth trying because the rewards can last a lifetime.

    Stanza 4:
    Team, this word is so symbolic with the importance of working together in order to achieve a mutual goal. As a single person we can show strength, but add this to a team, or in this case a friend, such a team is stronger and more capable together.

    Temps, this is a wonderful and inspiring write. I hope your friend feels the same way you do. One thing for sure is s/he will understand exactly how you feel after reading this.

    Take care my dear.

    Michael

  • 15 years ago

    by The Prince

    I loved how this poem began, so cute and providing a heartwarming mental image of a couple, radiant with the sunlight upon their faces.

    The second stanza goes from great imagery to personal and honest emotion that too has a real heartwarming feel to it. I can guess you were happy when you wrote this haha; the lack of rhyme works here too, if it rhymed it'd feel too forced I think. The last paragraph was inspiring, we sometimes overlook the joys of friendship, but your poem allows the reader to remember how important friendship is.
    Lovely write!
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Some pepole say that the one who love never hates, it take real courage to hold the hand of friendship . and see the part of life where it all mean everything .

    it si aways a happy tear to see after the thunderstorm that the sun shine upon you , friendhsip is always the treasure we never want to loose .

    tempsy ,i am very happy to read this piece you made me remember a lot of my friends i kept along the years , and the ones i lost ..

    great poem