Comments : Egotism

  • 15 years ago

    by Mister 47

    I beleve everything in this world can be used to be good or bad. too much of the thing can have a back fire on the person , even it si a good thing .

    egotism , the act of loving your self more then you love oterh to see your self more than every one . is a too bad usage of self confident . i think everyone need to love himself a bit , and be confident to a point , but he need tio know his humble place in this world . and his capacity . and know when he look in the miror it will be the same race and kind of living being , as every huan on this earth

    as for your poem, you but the last word in it , was a very wize decision to say. and that shows wizdom in your thinking.

    as for structure i would prefer if you cut it into stanzas , 1 bliock paragraphs are the worst kind for the reader eyes , they are hard and heavy to handle even teh poem is good .

    when you let down your gaurd
    you should fix the last word to be guard (typing mistake )

    i tried to look up the word "egotisically" but no result even logialy i understadn perfectly what you mean

    other than these things i nmention your poem deserve the credit and will be noted as 5/5

    CJ

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    Ohh Nawa I totally loved how you penned this...yeah people who have ego juz pissed me off. I can so relate to this poem just as you have pictured it. Yeah they need to learn how to be humble or they will soon crumble. I can feel the anger within you when you're writing thing poem and the excellent vocab juz emhance the poem to make it outstanding and realistic

    Exellent Job
    5/5