Do You Really Know Lonely?

I will definitely say that this piece is really heart touching and a good form of sad/dark poetry.

the poems title caught ma attention and i started write this poem..

i can see the pain in your every single word.. i can understand about the loneliness.

i am very sad for your great loss in you life..
no one can take that place in your heart except him. but hes gone... and that was such a sad loss of your life.

i like very first line because there you ask a question do you really know? and then you explained almost all about loneliness. great work..

the third stanza it happens with me too. sometimes you are so alone even among a thousand of people. it because our heart still there. and we don't want to end the story...

we know that we wont find them back but we still hope every day for good and sometimes to find him again... this hopes makes us alive.

For awhile the world is sweet
Hugs and kisses goodbye
Reality is back. Four walls of photos
They are your company now.

its good to see some nice and charming stuff in world.. but again that's not enough. because they are all memories. and no doubt the memories are the best friends. but these memories plays the most important roll in our mood. sometimes tht keeps us smile. and believe me in these smiling there are tears infact.. and sometimes we cry ;but in those tears we smile suddenly. these are the memories.. and they are the best friends of a lonely man...

last stanza is very sad. no words for it.. its just great and full of sorrows...

your poem deserves more than 5. but i have to give u five becoz of best option is this for me...

sorry for your loss.
MAY THE WORLD BRINGS YOU MORE HAPPINESS..

TAKE CARE
ALONE

I will definitely say that this piece is really heart touching and a good form of sad/dark poetry.

the poems title caught ma attention and i started write this poem..

i can see the pain in your every single word.. i can understand about the loniness.

i am very sad for your great loss in you life..
no one can take that place in your heart except him. but hes gone... and that was such a sad loss of your life.

i like very first line because there you ask a question do you really know? and then you explained almost all about loneliness. great work..

the third stanza it happens with me too. sometimes you are so alone even among a thousand of people. it because our heart still there. and we don't want to end the story...

we know that we wont find them back but we still hope every day for good and sometimes to find him again... this hopes makes us alive.

For awhile the world is sweet
Hugs and kisses goodbye
Reality is back. Four walls of photos
They are your company now.

its good to see some nice and charming stuff in world.. but again that's not enough. because they are all memories. and no doubt the memories are the best friends. but these memories plays the most important roll in our mood. sometimes tht keeps us smile. and believe me in these smiling there are tears infact.. and sometimes we cry ;but in those tears we smile suddenly. these are the memories.. and they are the best friends of a lonely man...

last stanza is very sad. no words for it.. its just great and full of sorrows...

your poem deserves more than 5. but i have to give u five becoz of best option is this for me...

sorry for your loss.
MAY THE WORLD BRINGS YOU MORE HAPPINESS..

TAKE CARE
ALONE

This poem is so touching and heartfelt. It really affected me... we all feel lonely sometimes, even when we have family and friends near us. Sometimes we take things for granted. Your poem sends a lovely message and I thank you for that. Excellent write.

Wow, this was very heart-wrenching.

I think it is very clever that you opened with a question! This automatically makes the reader answer it, and in my case the answer was yes and was already wanting to read on.

You then began to state things that the reader could relate to... example...

Phone constantly rings...
Visits from family become less ...
You're safe at home, yet all alone ...

i could hear myself whicle reading along saying Yes!!

I also think you managed to show the desperate want for some kind of interaction... any interaction so you use the animals, you can almost picture the character begging the animals to show you attention... where as it is almost always the other way around..

and also the lonliness is clearly described using the phone....

Phone constantly rings...
Telemarketers become your friends...
Maybe the phone will ring ...

It shows this is like the only lifeline the character has for any chance of a conversation.

I also like the way you created the scene in this stanza
" The sun is shining today
But the shades are drawn
Light long ago distinguished"

you can clearly picture a beautiful day but keeping the world outside because you just feel so desperatly trapped inside. you almost begin to seperate yourself into a different world.

i think this was a very touching poem, and deserves a 5/5. well done xx

I don't know what to say, this leaves me speechless. But it touched my heart for sure.