My bloody valentine

Here i lye in the corner of my room with a razor in one hand and a bottle of vodka in the other. Trying to kill the pain I'm trying to smother.
*Such a fantastic yet really touching opening stanza. I can imagine looking into your room and noticing how much pain you're feeling and it's not very nice .... Flawless start.*
I take a shot it burns as it hits my throat I remember the people. I see loving each other like there is no tomorrow but when i see them i feel only sorrow.
*It's horrible when you're epressed and everybody around you seems to have somebody to care for them when all we seem to think is that nobody does care when they actually do. I feel your pain, had quite alot of depession. Touching stanza*
I come back to this room to release my pain but this time there is no recovery as I know no one will love me
*Again we always think nobody loves us when they actually do. It's always hard to understand this but mostly when we are depressed we won't believe it. So much emotion.*
I get the razor and cut two deep lines the blood flows before my eyes the room is getting faint now i know I'm going to die alone this valentines
*OMG, such a sad end to a beautiful poem. I wondered why you were talkng about couples and love then I remembered it was called 'My bloody valentine' So powerful and emotion. I can't fault anything about this poem because it was beautiful in a sad yet wonderful way. 5/5, Em*

Very captivating of how you feel at that moment. Its very well written. Good job

This poem has very good / dark descriptions, you express yourself very well. I think to make the flow more consistant you should put a comma in here and there but other than that you did a really great job =]
Nice work

It was pretty good and i can feel ur pain cz i had a similar valentine..not as much but i did...great work...5/5

Um... i like it its great!
um i do deffp feel your pain
question... have you been hurt in the past and your expressin how cold you feel see other ppl in love and you aint?
If so then i deffo know how u feel. Its not a nice feeling. 5/5