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by Lady Nik
You left me, waved our love goodbye Tried to speak, but could only cry Many things, I needed to say Too late now, that you've gone away *I like how you write. Very inteasting wa to form your sentences. Very good way to start* Walled my heart, but I never knew That within, a demon now grew Nurtured by, feelings unspoken Through my wall, it has now broken *Love the diction here. I can relate to what your feelng. Love the emotions. They seem so raw and heartfelt* On my soul, it does wish to feed And in this, my hour of need I turn round, horrified to see All my friends, they've deserted me *This stanza was intense. I love the imagery* I succumb, to his twisted will Empowered, he moves for the kill Takes my breath, and I fall down dead Choked to death, by words left unsaid *Wow...that a brillant poet you are. This was such a good poem. I really can't see anything wrong with it. Nice work. Nik*