Florescence

This verse:

I've been plucking weeds
among other needless things
that suppress such harmony
with contrary refrains

is EXQUISITE!!!!

Brilliant write ... theres originality in the way you have expressed the beauty ... the serenity of nature and your feelings...

"Lately I've grown quite fond of Mother Nature,
I feed her bananas
and stardust from my dreams"

^^ very captivating and very unique ... there is something which holds you here ... loved it...

"I've been plucking weeds
among other needless things
that suppress such harmony"

^^ loved it ... its like you are saving or rather taking care of a loved one ... it has a cery lovely feeling attached to it...

//a ground could imagine//... very deep lines... it could be interpreted in so many ways...

superb write...

I adored this piece. I don't seem to see many nature poems lately which don't rely on all the description. It's good to see you adding not only to beautiful and tranquil feeling to my mind, but also the emotion. Because emotion to me lights a heart on fire and forms the most creative poetry.

As I said above I adored this piece, the wording was just so elegant like always. I found that I felt as if I was traveling with you in a peaceful dream. Quite gorgeous might I add.

"Lately I've grown quite fond of Mother Nature,
I feed her bananas
and stardust from my dreams"

I liked the lines above, Hardly ever do I hear the word bananas in poetry and even though it's a common word it's unused in my opinion. I like the fact you don't write with cliche wording. Definitly captures my attention.

"I've been plucking weeds
among other needless things
that suppress such harmony
with contrary refrains"

The stanza above was my favorite, I really can't explain why, I just felt it held a softer tone to it as I read it which really allowed my body to become calm. Lovely.

Overall this was a wonderful piece. Well done. -Mel