Candy Apples (Dodoitsu)

by Sylvia   Feb 8, 2009


Delightful candy apples.
A red caramel coating.
Sticky with each bite you take,
making faces red.

Copyright © 2009 Sylvia A. Feeley All Rights Reserved
**********************************************
Dodoitsu is a form of Japanese poetry developed towards the end of the Edo Period. Often concerning love or work, and usually comical, Dodoitsu poems consist of four lines with the syllabic structure 7-7-7-5 and no rhyme or metre is used and any subject is acceptable. In Japanese the word dodoitsu refers to a folk-song of work or love.

    report violation
0


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Such delighful poem... :) ...I frlt like tasting the candy apple .. beautifully written making the readers relish the taste of your poem :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Cara

    I dont know what a candy apple is :[ I really want to try one now that i read your poem! They sound really yummy. Especially with everyone elses comments, i think i must be quite deprived!
    Really nicely penned, great use of the form too.
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    Well after all is said and done i think you pretty much coined both aspects of the form very well, a toffee apple as we call them can be hard work to eat HAHA
    it is also a great love for many, so your poem remains true to its form and brought a melancholy smile to my face as well.Thanks

    Grant

  • 15 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Sylvia,

    This, like the form is delightful. I can clearly see a mouth desperately trying to crack through the red sticky toffee, resulting in its stickiness and colour to be transferred onto adjacent cheeks. An image all too clear and all too memorable from when I last had one. I believe it was when I last went to the fair?

    Well done, I want to try this form now.

    Take care

    Michael

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Mmmhhhh.....nice work Silvia, although I wonder if you have made one with a hidden meaning as well, lol.
    Eitherway: a lovely little gem:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

Read All Comments (5)

More Poems By Sylvia