Stand In The Rain

"Feel the cool drops,
tears from a saddened heaven.
Open up your hands,
hold it in close. "

^^I really like this opening stanza, I enjoyed the imagery and emotion and it pulled me into the piece.

"Time is going so quick,
blurring past innocent eyes.
Grasp a piece to keep,
stand in the rain."

^^I really liked the third line here, it stood out to me the most, I found it very moving and powerful.

"Echoes of silence
reverberate through the air.
Cries of lonliness,
let it all out. "

^^ I found this stanza to be somewhat weaker than the others, maybe work on this one a little?

"Hold onto time,
brace for the pain,
watch your life outside,
away with passive eyes. "

^^favourite stanza of the poem, I found it hard hitting and a great way to wrap the piece up.

I liked the idea behind this poem, I found it to be original and unique in concept.