Be Like Her

"Perfect eyes,
complimented by smiles,
perfection like a drug.
Helplessly taken,
be like her."

^^I adore this opening stanza, I love the imagery and feeling within these lines, it really draws me into the piece. Great way to start.

"Personal problems,
shoved deep down inside.
A light so radiant,
beauty shining throughout,
be like her."

^^I liked how you admitted that the personal problems are pushed deep down inside, it's something that many can relate to and you capture that well here.

"See the smiles?
They�re all so fake.
She's hiding something.
It�s tearing her apart.
Be like her."

^^ You need to edit the symbols here. I loved this stanza, as the reader it makes me wonder just what the person is hiding from everyone, and creates a sense of mystery to the poem.

"Survival like the key in life,
the fight to be perfect.
Always holding her head high,
she's crumbling down within.
You really want to be like her? "

^^I thought this was a really good way to end the piece, I liked how you admitted that it's all an act, that inside she's falling apart, and I adore the closing line, it really makes the reader think.

I enjoyed this.