Will I Cry (Loop Poetry)

by Sylvia   Feb 9, 2009


Will I cry, when you die?
Die, you will be gone,
gone, no longer here,
here on earth withdrawn.

Will I be glad or sad?
Sad an awful state of mind,
mind cannot think,
think or be left behind.

Will I shed tears of joy?
Joy, how can that be?
Be there, tears of despair,
despair is what I will see.

Questions I ask,
ask myself every day.
Day turns into night,
night keeps answers at bay.

Copyright © 2009 Sylvia All Rights Reserved
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Loop Poetry - Created by Miss Take. There is no restrictions on the number of stanzas nor on the syllable count for each line. In each stanza, the last word of the first line becomes the first word of line two, last word of line 2 becomes the first word of line 3, last word of line 3 becomes the first word of line 4. This is followed for each stanza. The rhyme scheme is abcb.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Raychil

    I loved this poem. And I must admit, I'ver never seen this style before. But I'm welcome to anything new and I'd love to try it. Wonderful piece here. It was so beautiful. I am a question writer as well so I love when others do the same, it really lets the reader see from the writer's side. <3
    <3Raych

  • 15 years ago

    by Faithless

    Wow i like how you penned this down. I think it is an interesting scheme. No doubyt that those are some of the questions that we will be asking when someone we love dies but you have portrayed it beautifully.No doubt that this poem is great but i think you can enhance it more if you were to put a question at the end of each question. But then again tts just my opinion...other than that it was really a delightful to read.

    Excellent Job
    5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by kate

    One word:

    Brilliant.

    =]

  • 15 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Silvia,

    A lovely format:)
    I have an answer to your questions, maybe it will be of some use to you ( it is what I feel when I think of you):
    in spite of all ,your soul felt it needed to be with him. There is love, although he was not able to give it to you in the way your heart desired it. In this life we can only be who we are and for a short while we might be abe to act diffenrently to please our lover, but eventually we must return to the behaviour that comes naturally to us.
    I think that you will know just what he meant to you when he is no longer there and also that you will grieve over his loss:)

    *hugs*

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 15 years ago

    by Cara

    I love this form! I havent come across it before, but i really like it. What a clever poem that you have written here.. really well done. I dont even know what to say, it was terrific. Good use of emotions.. it really had me intrigued till the last line.
    amazing work.
    5/5

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