Hmm, you wanna spread those walls with me?
LoL, JK. Great job, I love these type of poems.

Very sensual and done in good taste

Well written I would not change a thing

A hot poem, 5/5 in my book.

Lol

nice self satisfying. you should teach ur lover ur technique to please you. lol

a nice poem written in a smooth way

Keep it up

I am not one for explicit poetry expecially erotic; however, you wrote this piece very tastefully without using terms in a "pornographic" way. Overall a well written piece of poetry. The flow was good, as well as the structure. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Um, I was kinda creeped out by this poem. It was sensual in its own way; the rhythm of it reminded me of a Justin Timberlake song. I like how you peel off useless words until there's only essence left, and the flower metaphor you used for the first two stanzas was absolutely gorgeous. The only thing I didn't like was how bluntly you stated the"theme" of the poem throughout each stanza, but that's just how I feel.

Hm, I enjoyed this, you weren't sleazy or anything in short of pornographic, but I liked the simple form, the easy flow, and the nice imagery you used to convey the sensuality. Subtlety would have worked here, but I guess there's nothing to be done, and nothing that should be done really. You did well, and I look forward to reading more from you.

Danny

This is a nice short poem about a good subject.

I like the short stanzas used, but the flow was off some. For example, the second line, has 6 syllables but the next line only has two.

The first stanza confused me some. I can pick up on the imagery some, but it was just too short and undescriptive for me to follow through with. I liked that you compared this with the flower, but it really lacked the descriptive words needed to pull it off.

I did enjoy the third stanza.

I would try to add a few more lines and add more imagery. Using more powerful words will help out with this.

"Pink flowers
unfolding under dew.
My sex
blossoming through."

^^I love this starting, mainly because I love metaphors and similes and this metaphor is great. It's also a great comparison as I've noticed many people compare it.

"Petals wet,
crystallizing this heat.
Orgasms happening
under this sheet."

^^ My favorite line is the first. I'm not sure why, it just flows well. And I understand the comparisons, although I'm not sure if that make sense. I like the useof the word "crystallizing"

"I touch myself.
I love my sex.
I feel my walls
begin to flex."

^^I love this stanza just as much as the first. I can relate to this one.

"Drawing tighter,
I clench and start to peak.
There's nothing like
my own technique...."

^^ I absolutely love the last two lines. I can completely relate to this!! (lol) It's a great way to end this poem. All in all it is an excellent poem! Awesome!! 5/5