Away from here, sometiems, i wonder if the place you talk of is in mind or in real life ..

soemtiems, we leave and runaway from ourselves .i dont know what to say abotu this piece returning after all these times, memories.. that you ran away from ,and left it again and go away again...

i hope , that dont hapen to me or you in real life , i dont want to walk from my self 20 years .. to come back to find my old knife...

it si a very ling and sad poem , great structure of course.. and trully deserve the apreciation

but it wear me off to read all these ^_^
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Well well Jen I can see why you won. You totally have a very compelling story that is being told in a poetry format. Your descriptive description of the whole scene really allows me to visualize how you picture it. The choice of words that you used also enhance the story, bringing it to life.

Excellent Job
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Very touching beautiful write ... in each stanza i could visualize some special moments of your life unfold in front of me ... brilliant narration...

1st stana... I was captured by the metaphors your have used here... so creative and meaningful... as a reader i was very impressed ...

2nd stanza ... very heartfelt lines... there's so much loneliness behind each word...

3rd and 4th ... loved the analogy of life and a rusty knife ... what a comparision ... beautifully penned...

5th and 6th ... these have both nosatgic and sad feelings atached to it... it gives me a feeling that the girl here is missing those moments ... and feeling very lonely

7th and 8th ... these would have been some moments that she had cherished ... that she was not so sober at that time ... but here I didnt understand why she's turning away from happiness...

the rest of the stanzas made me feel that something very tragic happened and her world is no longer the same... I felt that she has died and that she's visiting her place as a ghost...

wonderful write :)

I completely hated it!!!

Just kidding it was great
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After all the comments of congratulations plus Porcelains in depth comments I wonder what I could add, perhaps that all poems to the individual have meaning to them that may or may not run parallel to what you were try to convey but this poem certainly had what it takes to get your message across, though it has been said before wonderful, a truly mind opening poem Ray S 5/5