by Normal is the Watchword Feb 10, 2009
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Hesitant. Damaged. Gathering the loose material, she, slowly, wraps it against her finger, breathing gently. Quietly. Lifting her head upward, briefly, the remnants of tears streaming the length of her begin to trace against her lips. Beneath strands of dark hair, she shakes her head, attempting to hide the paleness embedded within her skin. Cold. A slight shiver forms within her body. |
by Blissful
What a heartbreaking write! Your use of words and detail really set the sad scene for me and it was as if I was seeing everything with my own two eyes. The depth here was mind blowing and the emotion was real. I hope this doesnt come from personal experiance but the way you wrote it was so real that it could only be scripted with real experiance. All in alll I enjoyed it although it broke my hearft. I like that you didnt go into detail what exactly happened because I made my own lil story while reading it. |
This is very heartbreaking. Even thinking of this crime gives me shivering, but i am glad you wrote abt it...people need to read. |
by Cindy
Kaylee it is so good to see you posting again. This is a very deep and intense poem. Full of so much sadness. It is so hard to think that one person can handle so much heartache. |
by Lonely Rider
So overwhelming ... heartfelt write ... |