Comments : The Mirror Child

  • 15 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    That was really quite beautiful. The words and the depth of their meaning brought a bit of sadness to the mind. Loved the ending stanza.

    Well done.

    Always,
    Jeannie

  • 15 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Kaylee,
    As I have said before that I have a tendency to read more into a poem and sometimes see things that aren't there. But this poem found me thinking of a young girl wanting to rid her life. She is in a graveyard mounted against a stone trying to take her life and becomes utterly frustrated that only a droplet of blood became of her efforts. She realizes that the life growing inside her is something worth fighting for but doesn't want to continue on without her love. This was truly a deep and emotional piece. I enjoyed the story within and the message. Though we may hurt from pains of the past and although a loved one we may have lost we have to move on for the ones we leave behind. Sometimes we have to be the strength behind our loved ones. Your poem portrays the strength even through the sadness. Excellent Job and glad to see you writing again.

  • 15 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    This poem is very powerful . The meaning is amazing , and the imagery of your words is really fantastic . This gave me goose bumps . Since it doesn't rhyme or really have a flow to it , there's nothing I can critique you on . You used a vast vocabulary , and I think thats what makes the beauty in poems like these . Well done , 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Cindy

    Kaylee
    You have written a very sad piece here. But in the end there is hope.
    Great job!
    Love Cindy

  • 15 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    This is a powerful piece, i really loved this pattern of writing, it makes it so very exciting though the theme was sad.
    Really loved it.

    all the best and take care