Forgotten (Constanza)

Wow, I really enjoed this one. The emotion is great and very powerful. I can relaly understand this poem asa well. I like how you choose writting techniques to write your poems. Well done.

Soda E>

I don't know how I missed this one... Excellent word choice and great job adhering to the rules of the form. Deep and meaningful. ~~claps~~ Great job LR!

This is a wonderful Constanza
I love the word choice and theme

Oh I admire the form, it's' an interesting one I haven't seen often. You seem to have mastered it though.

'If by-chance destiny betray,
forking track,shoving us apart,
Unaware of imploring heart. '

'Forking track' is an excellent use of assonance, and the flow is introduced at a steady pace, punctuation is used accordingly so the reader doesn't rush through.

'Watching our dreams fleeting away,
would you effortlessly consent?
subsisting with augmenting vent.'

The second line is a bit of a mouthful, that adverb takes up a lot of room, I think. 'Augmenting vent' works very well. You have a sharp taste in words, and your linguistic skills are polished. It seems here
that the narrator has this complacent attitude despite the sadness brought. A good writer always lets the words and not the narrator's voice tell the story. Well done.

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Will twilight appear shadowed gray?
Immersed in yesters memory,
xeroxed in psychic gallery.'

Fantastic, the language here was incredible, and I don't like gushing but oh wow. Each word had a striking sound, and it works so well.

The fourth stanza isn't the strongest, yet still kept my interest with some good adjectives and imagery. 'Chime' was nice.

'Auctioning love in luck's soiree,
if our promises, Fate decline,
Will our heart-strings remain entwined?'

Ends with a roar, a brilliantly crafted poem, and the messages behind the poem are hidden behind beautiful words that are hard to crack open but once cracked, the poem comes through.

A simple narrative but so strong in character and tone. Loved it.

Deserves a nomination.

Wow, excellent write, I truely enjoyed read this poem. The flow was flawless and the structure was good. The imagery within was fantastic for it was greatly portrayed. I liked your choice of words and the rhyme scheme was good as well. Formed poetry is sometimes hard for people to grasp, but you did this flawlessly, excellent job!!! Keep up the amazing work.

Peace, Joe