If mocking winds begin to sway
erasing moments lost in time,
will I become, forgotton chime?
^^

These lines touched me deeply..
I think this must be the biggest fear for all who love..to be forgotten by the other.
I could feel the sadness in this so very well...you decribed this feeling in an excellent way.

Hugs,

5/5 Ingrid

Forgotten, somehow, I think we all wonder if a true love or lover has forgotten us after it ends. I like the use of questions and the last verse has to be my favorite. Good Job. 5/5

Wow...
I love this, from the beginning to the end. This is certainly my new favorite poem from you.
You did great job with the form and created really good flow throughout the piece, but which captured me the most was the depth of expressed emotions. Every stanza is meaningful, excellently worded and utterly breathtaking. I can relate to this write in a way which made it even more powerful for me. It sounds so personal, like it's written straight from the heart, yet it holds amazing poetical atmosphere which took every line to a new level. I can't decide which stanza is my favorite, I really love them all.
Overall, I am truly amazed. This is one of the best sad, really emotional poems I've read in a while. Greatly done.

An absolutely stunning form, and you wrote this piece so well! Every line was very captivating, each word had such a deep meaning. Amazing words, feelings/emotions were just flowing throughout the start to finish. 5/5 from me, a heartfelt read nice work~Take care, keep writing, always and forever....

As always expected from you....simply awesome. Great choice of words blended with a powerful writing style. Loved it

all the best and take care

Raj
What a beautiful poem. So full of sadness.
Excellent job on the form :)
Love Cindy

This seems to follow the structure really well .. And still has powerful words . That's not always easy . I have no critisism .. Other than to be careful because you write forgotten wrong .

Wow, excellent write, I truely enjoyed read this poem. The flow was flawless and the structure was good. The imagery within was fantastic for it was greatly portrayed. I liked your choice of words and the rhyme scheme was good as well. Formed poetry is sometimes hard for people to grasp, but you did this flawlessly, excellent job!!! Keep up the amazing work.

Peace, Joe

Oh I admire the form, it's' an interesting one I haven't seen often. You seem to have mastered it though.

'If by-chance destiny betray,
forking track,shoving us apart,
Unaware of imploring heart. '

'Forking track' is an excellent use of assonance, and the flow is introduced at a steady pace, punctuation is used accordingly so the reader doesn't rush through.

'Watching our dreams fleeting away,
would you effortlessly consent?
subsisting with augmenting vent.'

The second line is a bit of a mouthful, that adverb takes up a lot of room, I think. 'Augmenting vent' works very well. You have a sharp taste in words, and your linguistic skills are polished. It seems here
that the narrator has this complacent attitude despite the sadness brought. A good writer always lets the words and not the narrator's voice tell the story. Well done.

'
Will twilight appear shadowed gray?
Immersed in yesters memory,
xeroxed in psychic gallery.'

Fantastic, the language here was incredible, and I don't like gushing but oh wow. Each word had a striking sound, and it works so well.

The fourth stanza isn't the strongest, yet still kept my interest with some good adjectives and imagery. 'Chime' was nice.

'Auctioning love in luck's soiree,
if our promises, Fate decline,
Will our heart-strings remain entwined?'

Ends with a roar, a brilliantly crafted poem, and the messages behind the poem are hidden behind beautiful words that are hard to crack open but once cracked, the poem comes through.

A simple narrative but so strong in character and tone. Loved it.

Deserves a nomination.

This is a wonderful Constanza
I love the word choice and theme

I don't know how I missed this one... Excellent word choice and great job adhering to the rules of the form. Deep and meaningful. ~~claps~~ Great job LR!

Wow, I really enjoed this one. The emotion is great and very powerful. I can relaly understand this poem asa well. I like how you choose writting techniques to write your poems. Well done.

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