Overall great write, loved the flow and structure of this poem it was almost flawless. I think the flow would be flawless if you had more puncuation instead of just for the questions. Puncuation is very important in poetry, it shows the reader when to pause or stop. The imagery was good, I could picture this happening. |
by ReBecca
Zoning out or maybe zoning in |
On the end of a rope is a mataphor for being on the edge of fear or despair and was not meant to glorfy self harm of any form |
by Darien
You have some nice catchy rhymes in this poem. It's really hard to tell that this poem is about self-harm. I mean, I kind of caught it with the line; |
by HvN
Great ryme, beautiful message sent across. your word choice was simple yet very effective, it has a very attracting ring to it, great flow and overall very well written. |
Hmm.. i love it! every word send a powerful message. that something good can be evil too. the flow was just right. i love it!! amazing job. |
by jarrod
I love the line about zoning out or maybe zoning in. I really enjoyed reading this poem. |