by Courageous Dreamer Feb 14, 2009
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Love, romance /
i love you
Eternal love is exchanged through tender spoken words, |
Wow, excellent write, I enjoyed reading this short to the point piece of poetry which was filled with bliss. I liked your choice of words, they all mended very nicely cause the flow to be flawless in my opinion. The structure was good, and I liked how you ended the poem with 1 line, really hit the point home. |
by The Prince
Whoever said to replace commas with semi colons doesn't know the purpose of a semi colon. =/ |
Holding out a rose painted with beauty, |
This poem has an irresistible free flow that I would not tamper with |
by Hollymariee
This is very sweet and really well worded .. But if I may make a suggestion , I would exchange some of your commas for semi colons .. I don't know what it is , but they make poems pretty . It may be short but it really gets to the point . Well done , 5/5 |