Great read. Truly loved it.

-Droplett

This is very sweet and really well worded .. But if I may make a suggestion , I would exchange some of your commas for semi colons .. I don't know what it is , but they make poems pretty . It may be short but it really gets to the point . Well done , 5/5

This poem has an irresistible free flow that I would not tamper with

The only thing I would change is the spelling of effortlessly
Slowly words form a question then effortessly depart from lips,

Overall the only improvement would be very clever formatting that is nearly impossible on this site

The ending was quite a finally

……..most importantly to never let memories
…………… fade, to not forget words form …………….
……………..a question then effortlessly
……………………… depart from lips,
…………………………Will you be my
…………………………… valentine?

………………………………..love

…………………………………………………………….your name

Holding out a rose painted with beauty,
.I await your acceptance, to grasp it
...with care, protect it, and keep it
.....,,close to your heart, most
..........importantly to never
............let memories fade,
............... to not forget.
....................Slowly
words form a question then effortessly depart from lips, Will you be my valentine?

Whoever said to replace commas with semi colons doesn't know the purpose of a semi colon. =/

I read this last night, but I was in too much of a strange mood to comment it. You just get better and better, which is brilliant.

'Eternal love is exchanged through tender spoken words,'

How simplicity of wording can show our hearts true feelings, exchanged is a lovely word because it suggests the giving of presents, and love is a present isn't it? One of the most expensive of all presents...

'for its impossible to leave words lying at the bottom of a heart. '

This line spoke to me, because I have a problem articulating my words to people, my feelings lie rotting somewhere, never to be told..

I found the rest of the poem hard to pull apart cause it seemed weird doing it, and it flows consistently all the way through. There aren't many stand out bits, just the fact that altogether it really works. Adding the title/question at the end really adds something too. It's honest and really lovely.

Sorry I couldn't say much else, I just really liked it. You've gotten better at putting your thoughts down into coherent poetic pieces.

Wow, excellent write, I enjoyed reading this short to the point piece of poetry which was filled with bliss. I liked your choice of words, they all mended very nicely cause the flow to be flawless in my opinion. The structure was good, and I liked how you ended the poem with 1 line, really hit the point home.

There were 1 or 2 filler words which I think you could've done without, I'll point those out below. Overall a well rounded poem with great imagery. Good Job!

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Eternal love is exchanged through tender spoken words,
weaving together two devoted hearts with undeniable delight.
Sharing something special, a beautifully blossomed relationship,
despite complicated ways, these feelings expressed will not stop,
for its impossible to leave words lying at the bottom of a heart.

^^ As I mentioned above, there were a few filler words I thought you could do without.

Example, in the first line, "Eternal love is exchanged..." I think you could do without the word "is" I personally think it sounds and flows a little better without it.

Overall this stanza, was beautifully written, I just wanted to continue reading on to see what the rest of the poem was about. Kept me interested. Great Job so far.

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Holding out a rose painted with beauty, I await your acceptance,
to grasp it with care, protect it, and keep it close to your heart,
most importantly to never let memories fade, to not forget.
Slowly words form a question then effortessly depart from lips,

^^ The second line in this stanza, I think instead of repeating the word, "it" you can eliminate the first two. So another words, it would look like this, "to grasp with care, protect, and keep it close to your heart,"

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Will you be my valentine?

^^ Loved how you ended with a question as well as ending the poem with one line, really makes it that much more of a punch to the poem. I really liked that.

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Excellent write, keep up the great work!

Peace, Joe