by Neme juste un jouet Feb 15, 2009
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
"Let's go to that place, |
Ok lovely poem.. full of imagery and beautiful diction. i like the way you describe every little thing in this poem...gives the reader not only the enchanting scene you create, but a very clear visual...i think at the end you said likes instead of like...other than that i think the poem is great.. like then way you finished the last stanza...sort of gives the reader a choice between good and and sad..ending...overall amazing job..keep it up...i don't think this poem needs anything else added to it....but if you decide to do so let me know and i'll comment again.. |