This poem left me really sad. It was a little difficult to understand for me. I feel it is about a young girl who trusts a man who intends to do her wrong and does so in the end and kills her or her ideals...mmhhh..very sad write this is..
Beautiful nontheless.

Hugs to you both,

5/5 Ingrid

I don't know which is worse, to be naive and trusting and in need of approval from others or to be independent, not needing anyone or their approval. Young girls can be fooled and the people they think love them are only out to do them harm. Good job with the collab, cannot tell who wrote what. Excellent. 5/5

Wow you and TJ are two very unique talents.. it was really interesting to see what you two could come up with. Didnt surprise me at all of the final result. You two did a great job with this poem, although sad you really portrayed that emotion to the fullest extent. The stanzas were all written very well, I dont even have a favorite.. I cant even tell who wrote what. You two are quite the team! Both great poets.

Well done.
5/5.

"Nourished for her bright debut." That's such a cute line, it really made me smile! It made me think of a parent sending their child to their first day of preschool. Very well-done poem. It's so intuned to nature, it really makes you wanr to stop and smell the roses.

It's really amazing how you turned one idea into another. A flower, coming into the world for the frist time, and then being crushed. It's mindboggling! This poem really makes you appriciate the beauty that is arround us. And the rhyme.. not many people can do that, you know! Your poem flows so beautifully, and it really gets the point across. But being able to do all that AND make it rhyme is truly amazing. Great work!

Wow I must say that the both of you have done a fantastic job. I like how the both of you used the metaphors of seeds and roots representing birth and growth.I like the twist at the end of how the girl was lost her virtue. The vocab that was used, really enhances this poem bring it to life. Seriously both ur words intertwine each other smoothly that i couldn't even tell who wrote which lines

Excellent Job
5/5

This is an excellent collaboration, I knew with both of your talents, something breathtaking would be the result. An interesting idea presented very well. Respectively dark, and excellently penned poem.

A Collab coming from TJ and Michael together..I think it's simply a must read =)
You two never fail in your wordings and rhyme.
The imagery portrayed a beautiful scene in my head.
I truly loved everything in this piece.
Beautiful job you two. I'm mostly in love with your rhyme & words.

Love it
Write on !

Hey that was an excellent poem from the both of you, very sad but very well written as i would have expected from you guys. 5/5 on a job very well done

Grant

I really like this poem, i love the way it flows so easily on the tongue. (not that i read it out loud but it worked fine in my head lol). The storyline of it also seems to flow easily.. so just a very good poem overall in my opinion :)