Great ryme, each line has a decent flow, the s tory and sadness potrayed is clearly visible within each line and word you wrote.

5/5

Wow
Your a reallly great writter

I love this piece

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Wow this was a very strong an emotional piece...I liked it quite a lot actually and I wish that I could say how much this piece made me feel but I am limited on time..sadly...So i will say something short and sweet.

"It's like my tears conspired against me, slowly taking my strength away.
They waited until I was to weak to fight back, they waited for this day."

That was so very powerful. I absolutely loved those two lines. They made me really feel the emotion in this poem.