This poem is very good. Seems a little staggering to read, and the ryhme scheme lacks slightly. All in all though, it is very good write full of emotion and imagery.

I really enjoyed this though its sad it has alot of relatability to it.
The rhyming was good as was your message.

I lost the will to fight,
even more, the will to live.
I once said I'd give everything,
but now I have no more to give.
^^
This stood out for me and was rather catchy.
Em