Somebody take me Home

Another excellent poem. See, I can understand this poem, some of your oters I couldn't at all really. The flow was good. I think it was off on a few lines, but it's okay. The emotion is good as well.

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Distorted hope quietly sleeps,
caressed by deceptive breeze

Smiles dissolved into horizon,
dreams framed upon a tear

These four lines run deep & I the way how
your emotions are pinned with nature. This is
a touching piece where tears can be felt..take care.

Very nicely done. If I can make a couple of grammar suggestions:

deceptive breeze
where I once lived

Good word choice and flow in this piece. Seems like someone is homesick.....I enjoy reading your work as the rhyme is not forced but flows smoothly and makes perfect sense. great job Raj!

This was a fantastic piece of poetry. You penned it to absolute perfection. The wording was flawless. Such meaning behind your words, i love the ending. Really clever. I just love it.. i dont even know how to explain. But it was great. Really nice work.
5/5