Looking At You

"Looking at you
I see a future
I see forever in your eyes
And your heart on your sleeve"

^^I enjoyed the opening, but didn't feel like you needed the "i." Maybe :

Looking at you
Seeing a future
Searching for forever in your eyes
And your heart on your sleeve

"Because looking at you
I know without a doubt
That if I could,
I would give you the world
I would give you the moon and the stars
And all the pastel sunsets you could ever want"

^^I adore the imagery within these lines, particularly the last one, however again I felt that you used "I" to much, maybe :

Because looking at you
Know without a doubt
That if I could,
Would give you the world
The moon and the stars
And all the pastel sunsets you could ever want

"Or I could just give you me
And you could just give me you
Because you will always be enough
In my eyes at least"

^^favourite part so far, the emotion in these lines is incredible.

"The person I want to give my soul to
The one who makes me laugh until I cry
The one person who is always on my mind
Regardless of time or location
Or even need of sleep"

^^I'm enjoying this so far, but the amount of fillers are spoiling the piece for me (I, the, and etc) maybe :

The person I want to give my soul to
One who makes me laugh until I cry
That one person who is always on my mind
Regardless of time or location
Or even need of sleep"

"My dreams have been better lately
With you in them"

^^I adore these lines, so sweet and heartfelt.

"Somehow during the night,
Though I know it's impossible
I wind up wrapped in your arms-
The warmest and only place
I could ever
Ever want to be."

^^I adore the sincerity and emotion within these lines, it really warms the heartstrings.

"Looking at you
I see a future
I see forever in your eyes
And your heart on your sleeve"

^^I liked the repetition, I thought it got the point across well without becoming overbearing.

"Looking at you....
I think I'm falling in love with you."

^^Beautiful closing lines, so sweet and simple, yet filled with so much depth and meaning.

Though I found this okay, if I'm being honest I don't think this is one of your best, you're a far better writer than this poem shows.

Well Skye I skye i love what you have written here. I like the idea that the poem is sort of like a confession. using just simple words to express ur emotions, I can feel how deeply in love u are with this person. Well it was a delightful to read this poem Keep it up

Excellent Job
5/5

Wow, this was so direct and lovely, and sweet! You didn't beat around the bush or anything, and I wont pull it apart and anaylse it because it all works as one big piece. I like how you've used the form, it's disjointed and it works that way. I don't rate poems, just comment but I loved this, excellent work lovely.

'I don't care
About the logistics of it.
Don't care what x+y comes out to.'

Love isn't an equation, there's no right or wrong. Great way of putting it!